An Army of Curious Eyes

November 17, 2009

Today we had parent teacher conferences for Max and Mia. It was the first one for Max, and the first time Cindy and I have been able to attend as a couple. It was awesome to hold hands and sit across from our children’s teachers in tiny seats that made me feel even more Lurch-like than my 6′3” frame usually does. Neither conference held any surprises, but then again, they were more for confirming our thoughts than anything else. I only mention them because they serve as preamble to today’s story.

The writer’s workshop Cindy teaches to the fourth grade students fell an hour before our first scheduled conference. We drove in to school together. I sat in the library pretending to work while Cindy taught her lesson and pretended not to notice me watching.

Because of the conference schedule, the students had a minimum day. If you remember from your days in school as I remember from mine, this meant most of the students were counting the minutes until the final bell and strongly resenting any work preceding their early dismissal. This accounted for the few scattered moans and groans which loudened the library when Cindy concluded her lesson on Shel Silverstein and asked the class to finish the day with fifteen minutes of free poetry writing.

“Would you like me to do the assignment, Mrs. Platt?” I asked, raising my hand.

A few children chuckled. Cindy smiled. “Yes, Mr. Platt,” she said. “I would like that very much.” She handed me a sheet of paper.

I noted the army of curious eyes on me, scribbled for a few minutes, then laid down my pen and went back to the laptop. When time was called, Cindy asked if I would read my work out loud to the class.

The collective smiles plastered on the sea of little faces just two minutes later is a sight I can’t get out of my head. If this is what being a children’s author is going to be like, I’m fully on board and can’t wait to hand the conductor my ticket.

While writing, I thought little of audience reaction. I was merely trying to support Cindy while also showing the students that they should be listening rather than speaking, that writing can be both fun and powerful, and that there’s not much to it other than allowing your mind to start moving that pen across the paper. I certainly didn’t expect the response. Yet smile for smile, it might have been the best ten minutes of writing I’ve ever spent.

The children were enchanted. Even more, they were stirred. It wasn’t that they were impressed, necessarily, it was that at least a few of them were visibly inspired. Some of the children merely saw a magic trick and wore a “how did he do that?” sort of wonder on their faces. This delighted me, of course, as I love to think of my little ditties as verbal slights of hand, but what I truly loved in that moment were the other looks, the ones etched deeper into their expressions.

The ones that said, “I wonder if I can do that too?”

The answer is yes, absolutely. All it takes is a lot of practice, until familiarity with the words and their innate rhythm is an extension of instinct. Yet children do this already, whether it is with their feet anticipating the skip of a rope, their minds memorizing the levels of a video game, or their tongues tasting the sequence of words that will get them their way.

I hope the emotion wasn’t fleeting, and that at least a few of those children in the library will remember the moment and take it with them, wherever they may choose to go. I know for me, I found deeper purpose in my writing today.

Cindy stole my original, but she let me have it long enough to copy it here.

Enjoy!

4th graders are awesome, though best when they listen
Instead of the blah-blah-ing that gets them to missing
The info the teachers are spitting and spewing
To let the kids know what they’re supposed to be doing
Writing is fun – it’s like cake and balloons
On a Saturday morning spent watching cartoons
Except writing is better because you get to choose
What things you should keep and what things you should lose
You’re the creator – the world’s yours to build
Who gets to live there and how it is filled
Unicorns, dragons and men with red eyes;
Fairies and magic, an ending surprise
Fantasy’s fun if you break every rule
Decide what is dumb and decide what is cool
Be your best writer, place pen to the page
Write the best story, then be all the rage

Writer Dad

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  • Hey Sean, to think that you so quickly wrote out that poem amazed me, then I saw your mom's poem. At least now I know where you get it from :)

    Thanks for sharing and for being such a good role model for those kids. And I love that Cindy stole your original. That made me laugh.
    .-= Kool Aid´s last blog ..Playin’ Opossum =-.
  • Hiya Kool Aid!

    Yeah, my mom definitely encouraged my experimentation with language, for better or worse. : > ) She allowed me to swear at a very early age, though never in public which is a good thing. Basically, she taught me that all words have value and it's a lesson I've never forgotten. I loved the moment in the library, saw the potential, perhaps for the first time, for what I can do with my writing, and grew instantly excited about my upcoming book. Even more than I already was!
  • True talk :) :)
    .-= Marinela´s last blog ..Greatest technique of violence =-.
  • Thanks Marinela, and I LOVE your poetry site. Keep up the good work!
  • We all like a story, the weirder the better,
    the plot can turn fast, like a change in the weather.
    It's fun to learn how to spin a great tale,
    like pinnochio trapped inside of that whale.
    A good teacher can train you, just give her a chance
    to guide your ideas, put your mind in a trance.
    You'll be amazed at what you can do
    it's almost as easy as tying your shoe.
    It's how they all started, those authors of fame
    playing with words, but more than a game.
    Once you get going, you'll soar and you'll fly
    but don't waste any time or you'll ask yourself "why"?
  • I like that your spitting your comment in rhyme
    It's really a fun way to fritter the time
    The words come so quick, "you know what" from a goose
    They'll rumble around until you let loose
    Obviously my verbiage was nurtured quite well
    Now I lay down the rhythm like ringing a bell
    Thanks for always talking to me as a kid
    Even with all the obnoxious I did
    It's one of the reasons I now think so fast
    The skills of my present, piled onto my past
  • Yep, you were a wild one, I can't disagree,
    but they say the apple doesn't fall far from the tree.
    Encourage a young one with humor and praise
    and it should pay off for the rest of your days.
    I'm so glad you had such a great, twisted brain
    now you can write without feeling no pain (double negative, nix)
    Creativity's fun, of that there's no doubt
    just have the confidence to let it all out.

    all this rhyming is making me dizzy and weak, I think
    a big cheesburger I will go seek!!!!
  • How long can you do this, 'cause I've got all day
    And you know I never run out of new things to say
    I'll rhyme in the morning and then rhyme at lunch
    I'll rhyme during dinner and I have a hunch
    That I can keep going even when I am dreaming
    The words in my head are all twisted and teeming
    Foaming and frothing, all set to explode
    Syllables spilling - I'm cracking the code
    Chew on your cheeseburger, swallow your shake
    Feast on your french fries and dream about steak
    If you wanna keep going, you know I'm right here
    I'll keep this thread running till the end of the year
  • I'll look forward to Grammy Night, as I always do
    But please, there's no need for your cookies or stew
    I'd rather you knock on the door right on time
    A Thursday on schedule would be so sublime
    While we're on the subject, my mother so dear
    Can you please not bring any chotskys 'round here?
    Seriously, we're swimming in a sea of detritus
    And I'm afraid the navigation will give me arthritis
    Please bring your smile, your wit and your charm
    Do it on time and we'll ring the alarm
    We'll call in the media so they too can witness
    Your attempt at finding some on the dot fitness

    Love you too. : > )
  • Oh, pshaw, boy, of that there's no doubt
    you have talent like a tile store has grout.

    we could keep going like this, you and I
    but you're right, I would rather go eat some pie.
    While this is great fun,I could go all day
    I have things to do and places to play
    laundry to do, dishes to wash
    cats to feed , perhaps a roach to squash.
    I'll cut it short now and bid you adieu
    See you at grammy nite with cookies or stew. (love you!)
  • OM
    I think the secret to me getting good education by the time I finished high school was that the cool kids were doing it. As long as the cool kids loved history and literature, we all loved history and literature. By writing this poem, you were the cool kid, you know? You were the one who made them realize that letting their imagination loose was fun.
    .-= OM´s last blog ..November is National Adoption Month =-.
  • Well said, and yeah, there's no doubt I touched the cool nerve for some of those kids. I just hope it manages to stay with them for a while, at least long enough for them to implement the idea and make it a natural reaction for them. Thanks for the comment! : > )
  • "4th graders are awesome, though best when they listen"

    HA! Subtle. :)

    You know, my mom used to record her voice reading to us. We wore those tapes OUT. Is there anyway to incorporate that into what you are doing? They can listen as they read along?
    .-= Hayden Tompkins´s last blog ..Marriage on The Brink =-.
  • Absolutely. I'll be starting several podcasts soon. The first one on the table is a reading of Penny to a Million, my first children's books. And absolutely, I'd love to record all my rhymes as well.
  • This is an awesome story! Talk about a teachable moment. :) I love the poem; I'll show it to my kids as soon as I can get them in front of the computer.
    .-= Kim, Rambling Family Manager´s last blog ..Book Review: Eating Animals =-.
  • Hi, Kim! I'm glad you liked it. Feel free to let me know what your kids thought as well. And yeah, it was definitely a teachable moment.
  • Yes, the “I wonder if I can do that too?” expression is priceless, especially when kids know an adult is there for them, supporting their efforts. I can see you touring with your books and reading to school kids everywhere. Videos of those moments will be priceless, too.
    .-= Lori Hoeck´s last blog ..How Grandma’s wisdom helps in self defense =-.
  • I imagine you see that look from small children with belts around their waists quite often! I loved seeing the look, it was as inspiring for me as I believe it was for them. Yes, I can't wait to tour and have an audience of children waiting for my next title. Right now I can't believe that I'm going to print something that my daughter will be reading by the end of the year. The mere thought makes me smile ear to ear.
    .-= Sean´s last blog ..Writing Prompt #2 =-.
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